4.1 Radical Rewrite: Information E-Mail—Negative Announcement (p. 109)
The wordy, inefficient, and disorganized message invites department managers to three interviewing sessions to select student interns. However, to be effective, this message desperately needs a radical rewrite.
Your Task (note, this differs from the book instructions slightly):
Study the message and list at least five weaknesses. You do not have to re-write the e-mail, but make suggestions for how to improve it. Offer concrete examples to avoid excessive wordiness and repetition. Also think about how to develop an upbeat tone and improve readability.
The post 4.1 Radical Rewrite: Information E-Mail—Negative Announcement (p. 109)
The wordy appeared first on blitzarchive.com.